Having reread what you've put, this looks OK. It seems a bit odd having the equation for water formation as 2H +
1/
2(g) + O
2(g)
H
2O(g), but if that's what it says, fair play.
I got a little confused between O (the letter between N and P) and 0 (the number zero)
I'd make sure you have the right enthalpy of formation for water though, I don't have my data books to hand, but I seem to recall there was data for liquid water and for gaseous water as well.
However, for the first question, I don't see any indication that you've corrected the volume of hydrogen generated to standard conditions (though it is possible I suppose that the two altered conditions cancel). What is the volume of one mole of gas under your conditions? (pV = nRT)
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